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Wanton Skye Eastridge

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Philippa is the girl every parent dreamed of while Nolan is the boy every parent feared getting. They are privileged siblings with nothing in common but a general dislike for one another. Lincoln is the man in love with his best friend. Eventually Nolan leaves home, and Philippa, with an inheritance and a desire to be anywhere else. War breaks out and the world is engulfed in chaos as Lincoln, Philippa, and Nolan are put to the test in their own ways: work, relationships, fighting, and the need to be have control.

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  • 43959 words
  • About 176 pages
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3 comments on "Wanton"

Kaiiii on Nov. 2, 2017, 4:38 p.m. said:

Kaiiii


I really enjoyed the book but the ending left me unsatisfied. The story in whole confused me to no end. There was no climax, but maybe there was and I overlooked it. While reading this I had to remind myself this isn't fanfiction because it talks a lot about "butts" and "boobs" which don't seem professional. Also Phillipa's moods irked me sometimes because I understand her dislike for her brother's ways but he apologized so why is she mad for? Other than that great job on the story!! And will you do a revised ending?

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Skye Eastridge on April 9, 2017, 5:46 p.m. said:

Skye Eastridge


I have never read/seen the Twilight saga so I don't know anything about that. I do, however, appreciate the direct feedback and will definitely consider it when I end up doing a re-write. I think I already have some ideas.

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Elizabeth.Baugh on April 5, 2017, 1:38 p.m. said:

Elizabeth.Baugh


The characters, especially Philippa and Lincoln are both basically ciphers and I am not super compelled by them. You need to add some more layers, they remind me so much of Twilight characters. Philippa is essentially an exact replica of Bella. I think this story could go somewhere but I would work on cleaning up your language... talking about women with "boobs" and "butts" makes me feel like I'm reading something very immature. Another thing is that when you have dialogue you can't end without punctuation (it's small but distracting). For example, "I like dogs," she said. Make sure to remember the comma. I would also remove most of the descriptions of how people look because it doesn't really add anything. Nolan appears to have layers which is great!

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