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The Water's Surface Sam Gates

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Jamie, a 15-year-old artist and overachiever, has a crush on his friend Conner. He's sworn to ignore his feelings and get past it but when Jamie's other friend, Justin, finds his sketchbook of lovey-dovey doodles, the chemistry of the trio goes awry. Upset by Justin's bad reaction, Jamie finds solace by hiding under the water in his bathtub. After waking up in the hospital, Jamie is made to attend group therapy where he meets a new friend he can confide in. Jamie begins to open up about his art and confront the slightly scary aspect of coming out, all while trying to understand Justin's weird behavior. Through angst and misunderstandings, these friends learn more about each other and what it's like to be in love in high school.

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  • 45089 words
  • About 180 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    8

  • Tears

    7

  • Laughs

    9

  • Thrills

    7

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4 comments on "The Water's Surface"

Piper on May 10, 2017, 7:26 p.m. said:

Piper


I absolutely love the relationship between Justin and Jamie and how the plot goes in the opposite direction that the reader thinks it will. I think the subplot about Jamie's suicide attempt could use more researching. He shows no signs of being suicidal prior to that and researching the topic would help make the scene feel more realistic. Other than that, this is a beautiful manuscript! I hope it's selected for publication!

This story reminds me of another swoon reads book, Been Here All Along by Sandy Hall. The characters have the same sort of lovable vulnerability.

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Vivyan Lynne on March 8, 2017, 4:07 a.m. said:

Vivyan Lynne


First things first. The FEELS!! It was so cute and Jamie and Connor are both so dense, but in a lovable way. It made me laugh and want to shake sense into the characters at times. It did a good job of transitioning who Jamie liked from Connor to Justin, not too abrupt but it definitely had good build up, same as with Justin's liking Jamie, good build up there too. I like how Jamie's family was so supportive, I think that's good to show. Although I did find it odd that Jamie's family didn't do anything for his birthday. There are some typos and some oddly worded sentences. Overall, I liked it and wished it was longer (just a little) there were a good many places where it was like and "next week" or "days later" and some of that time just felt like well, what about those days in between?

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Vivyan Lynne on March 7, 2017, 5:44 p.m. said:

Vivyan Lynne


I'm really liking the start of this story, has a lot of potential and some fun characters!

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Vivyan Lynne on Feb. 28, 2017, 6:31 p.m. said:

Vivyan Lynne


This is really cute so far! I'm only 10% in but I'm definitely enjoying it! Jamie is an adorable character and I swear Connor already knows that he's gay xD the conversation in the first chapter about who they'd each pick was too funny!

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