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The Vessel Russell Nohelty

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What would you do to save your family?

Althea's world is controlled by the Five, immortal beings who get their minds transferred into new hosts every generation in order to continue the important work of saving the City from the outside world. The rest of the world is an uninhabitable wasteland. However, the City is a beacon of home, guarded by an impenetrable force field. Only the Five know the secrets of the forcefield and keeping them alive is paramount to the survival of the City.

So when one of them dies, the City goes into an uproar. What will happen to their home now?

Immediately, the remaining gods decide to transfer their consciousness into nubile bodies that can survive any attack.

Althea is one of those who volunteers for the competition of a lifetime in order to save her city and everybody she loves inside it.

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  • 73426 words
  • About 294 pages
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  • Heat

    3

  • Tears

    3

  • Laughs

    2

  • Thrills

    6

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23 comments on "The Vessel"

avrochajr on Jan. 25, 2018, 3:16 a.m. said:

avrochajr


It was a fresh take on the dystopian story. The characters were well thought out and well defined and the story moved along without a hitch. I was engrossed from start to finish.

Possibly Hunger Games or Maze Runner but not completely like them.

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Russell Nohelty on Jan. 25, 2018, 12:02 p.m. said:

Russell Nohelty


Thank you so much. I'm happy you enjoyed it!

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SonOfFreedom2 on Jan. 24, 2018, 11:32 p.m. said:

SonOfFreedom2


Moves quickly, characters started a little two-dimensional, but are slowly fleshing out. Good enough to keep going!

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Russell Nohelty on Jan. 25, 2018, 12:02 p.m. said:

Russell Nohelty


Thank you so much :)

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NamDog on Dec. 27, 2017, 12:16 p.m. said:

NamDog


It draws you in by catching your interest and making you want to see what happens next.

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Russell Nohelty on Jan. 17, 2018, 8:08 p.m. said:

Russell Nohelty


Thank you so much. :)

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R. L. Smith on Sept. 19, 2017, 5:24 p.m. said:

R. L. Smith


So far you have my attention. Sometimes it feels like you tried too hard to mesh backstory and other information with the current story flow. Try not to get too trapped up in that. There are other ways to answer your readers supposed questions if you feel it is imperative to the current story.

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Russell Nohelty on Sept. 19, 2017, 6:42 p.m. said:

Russell Nohelty


Ah, yes. I fear that is present in all of my work. I do data dumps throughout. It is something you will find in lots of my stuff.

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R. L. Smith on Sept. 17, 2017, 11:32 p.m. said:

R. L. Smith


Great job with the first chapter hook, and rapid endearment to Wind's plight. Well done. Good momentum and exciting premise.

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Russell Nohelty on Sept. 18, 2017, 10:41 a.m. said:

Russell Nohelty


Thank you so much. I'm so appreciative that you said that.

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