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The Price Cassie Rose

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Nadia, orphaned by the first Vigilant Men uprising, is taken in by Mr. Lennox, an ominous man with a vision to create the most stunning ballet company in existence. He teaches the already talented girl to dance like an unearthly creature, but requires her undying loyalty in return. However, as he builds the famous Lennox Company, uprising once again stirs the city of Rumonin, and the opulent ballet finds itself out of place in the new and austere culture of the Vigilant Men. Throughout it all, Nadia falls in love with her partner, Ferdinand, a famous young dancer who awakens her long silent heart. A jealous Lennox, the growing civil unrest, and a nation at war conspire to separate the dancers forever. Nadia must find a strength inside of her to brave a new world and fend for herself against the coming of an uncertain future.

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  • About 349 pages
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  • Tears

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31 comments on "The Price"

Renae Mercado on Oct. 11, 2017, 11:10 p.m. said:

Renae Mercado


What a great concept. The story pulled me in and I just had to know how it would end. It was wonderful to see how Nadia grew throughout the story. And of course I love the ballerina aspect!

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Cassie Rose on Oct. 12, 2017, 8:05 p.m. said:

Cassie Rose


Wow, thank you! :) I am glad that you liked the ballet aspect, as I am obsessed with ballet and want to spread my love of it with everyone! Ha ha! <3 Thank you for reading!

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Renae Mercado on Oct. 11, 2017, 7:43 a.m. said:

Renae Mercado


What a fantastic beginning! I can't wait to read more!

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Cassie Rose on Oct. 11, 2017, 8:32 a.m. said:

Cassie Rose


Thank you! I appreciate it! :)

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Kennedy Vega on Oct. 8, 2017, 4:32 p.m. said:

Kennedy Vega


I loved the start! I'm a few chapter in and it's very engaging. Can't wait to see where the story goes :D

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Cassie Rose on Oct. 9, 2017, 2:18 p.m. said:

Cassie Rose


Oh my goodness, thanks so much! :D I hope you'll like the rest!

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Samantha Hastings on June 20, 2017, 11:01 a.m. said:

Samantha Hastings


Very intriguing. I liked how the plot started with all the action. Drew me right in.
I don't know anything about ballet, but the descriptions bring it alive. I already like Nadia and the male dancer (couldn't spell his name) already has a mysterious attraction.
Just a little typo: "father" should be "farther and farther."
Chapter one: at the beginning, tell the reader how many years have passed.
A date and city name at the beginning of the prologue and/or chapter heading would help give the reader context.

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Cassie Rose on June 20, 2017, 2:07 p.m. said:

Cassie Rose


Thanks so much for the comment, Samantha! :) Your suggestion hit upon something I've been trying to figure out how to fix for a while. I want to indicate a year, but, since it's a made-up world, I'm having trouble figuring out how to do that. :P I'll have to keep thinking on it. But I can always take a look at adding in the city's name and how many years have passed!

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KyraMNelson on June 13, 2017, 3:23 p.m. said:

KyraMNelson


I'm totally jealous of the worldbuilding in this. I could really picture the setting and the conflict felt very real to me. I agree with what a couple other people have said that some of the descriptions felt a little long. Also, I would have liked to see more Ferdinand in the beginning. Maybe slow down the initial attraction they feel for each other (I don't feel like they've actually spent much time together when they first kiss). But overall, I thought the story was really fantastic. Loved the voice!

I'd call it Phantom of the Opera meets Anastasia.

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Cassie Rose on June 14, 2017, 11:35 a.m. said:

Cassie Rose


You read like the wind! Ha ha! :D Thanks so much for reading the whole thing, and I super appreciate the comment! World building was one of my Big Focus items in previous drafts, so I'm really glad that you liked it and thought it worked. And in the draft I'm working on now, I can definitely look at description length and Ferdinand's face time in the beginning. Thanks so much for the suggestions and for taking the time to read!

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