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The Meaning Games amandarose

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Avarie Castelo likes to play games. At the top of the hierarchy in her social circles and Bethesda High School, she is powerful, smart and cunning. Those close to her are at risk and those who she dislikes are in danger. The games begin and end when Avarie wants them to. With nobody in control of their own fate but Avarie, she is not to be underestimated. But to what end will Avarie use the games? What lengths will she go to in order to remain in control of everyone? The games are looming and the stakes are high. Is everyone going to make it out alive?

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  • 127966 words
  • About 512 pages
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4 comments on "The Meaning Games"

caralin on May 22, 2017, 1:58 p.m. said:

caralin


I think the concept of this was really cool and it was nice that you had unique characters. I believe you fixed the formatting while I was in the midst of reading the book, and that helped a lot! However, I think you kind of let both the story and the characters get away from you a bit. The "games" are just minor, uncomplicated pranks and conversations, and I think for them to be the main focus (and title) of the book, there really needs to be more to them. Most of the time you handled having so many characters pretty well, but I think in the middle of the book you kind of lost track of them, it especially seemed like Saja slipped your mind completely for awhile.
The fact that you wrote an entire book and worked out this plot is really impressive, you just really need to work on the games and the showing a reason for the girls' friendship to give the story its purpose. Great job!

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amandarose on May 23, 2017, 3:52 p.m. said:

amandarose


Hello. Firstly, I'd like to say wow, thank you for reading the whole thing! Yes, sorry I did have some issues with formatting to begin with, but I have (hopefully) sorted those now.

This book is a series of 5, so the games, as the book series goes on, do become more important and more serious. As the first book, I concentrated on introducing the characters, entering you into their worlds, understanding them or at least beginning to, because they (especially Avarie) are not one dimensional. I can see from your POV though, and I did consider altering the approach to how I started this series, and changing things. However, If I did not put this up as it stands, I would not get helpful feedback like yours.

I try to be very organised with my writing and plan the whole thing before I start, but admittedly, at times I connected less with Saja, she didn't take centre stage in my head, but alas, thank you for pointing that out too. I can work on that.

Your feedback is greatly appreciated! Thank you so much!

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PointPi on May 17, 2017, 2:38 p.m. said:

PointPi


Fixing the formatting would really help with the readability. Everything is written in one bug huge block of text. It's hard on the eyes and makes it difficult to follow anything happening.

The premise sound interesting and the few pages I was able to get through sounded intriguing, but the formatting is a big turn off.

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amandarose on May 23, 2017, 1:33 p.m. said:

amandarose


Hello there. Hopefully the formatting has been fixed and this has been made easier for you to read?

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