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The Dragons Within CarysJ

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All magic from the Welsh valleys was gone. In its place was a charred reminder that there was a wickedness in the world, a wickedness that could corrupt everyone it touched.

Anwen Morgan is in her final year at school. At sixteen her future within the small mining village of Blenthorin is all but cast in stone. She’s destined to wander the cobbled streets while her boyfriend, Bran, braces the deep darkness of the mine.

But everything changes when Anwen and best friend, Efa, notice a bright light sparkling up on the hillside during their walk home through the valleys. Following the light will not only draw them away from their chosen path but also put the people around them in grave danger.

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  • 59570 words
  • About 238 pages
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12 comments on "The Dragons Within"

Bellatrone on Feb. 5, 2018, 6:59 a.m. said:

Bellatrone


Yay

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Erika Metcalf on Jan. 5, 2018, 2:04 p.m. said:

Erika Metcalf


This was utterly fantastic. Incredibly well written, great pacing, and wonderful character development. Thank you for a beautiful read. My only small critique would include scattered spelling/grammar mistakes, and did I totally miss how the title came into play? Not sure where the “dragons within” came into play, but perhaps I missed something. Well done :)
There is a group of books called “Once Upon A Time” written by various authors that are retellings of famous fairy tales. This reminded me of those.

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CarysJ on Jan. 11, 2018, 5:47 a.m. said:

CarysJ


Thanks so much for taking the time to read the book and leave feedback I really appreciate it. And I'm definitely going to check out the Once Upon a Time books as they sound right up my street! : )

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Erika Metcalf on Jan. 1, 2018, 8:28 p.m. said:

Erika Metcalf


Fantastic set up! I’m totally hooked, and can see everything clearly. The setting description and character development so far have both been phenomenal!

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CarysJ on Jan. 2, 2018, 10:39 a.m. said:

CarysJ


Thanks so much I'm so glad you're enjoying the book xx

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Eliza Rosewood on Nov. 19, 2017, 11:43 p.m. said:

Eliza Rosewood


I kept reading and couldn’t stop. This story was incredible. Such a great ending and full of betrayal and “herd mentality” and extremely an brave heroine. I’m crying as I write this because the ending was so bitter sweet. Incredible work!!!
The writing is similar to Diana Wynne Jones and it has an old fairy tale feel to it

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CarysJ on Nov. 20, 2017, 8:43 a.m. said:

CarysJ


Thanks so much for taking the time to read and for leaving some feedback, really appreciate it!

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Eliza Rosewood on Nov. 20, 2017, 9:03 a.m. said:

Eliza Rosewood


No problem! I was thinking about some constructive feedback and the big thing is maybe including some more scenes with Anwen and Ivor. Though I do trust her judgement it seemed hard to believe she would defend him when he was behind her father losing his job and such.

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Kobla on Nov. 19, 2017, 4 a.m. said:

Kobla


Interesting. Typical young folk abut their business but I think the fire was rushed and that no proper investigation was done into it doesn't pan well for me. The kids might have gone on to find out Ivor was not such a bad old man, to some happy ending.

I will leave comparisons out.

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CarysJ on Nov. 20, 2017, 8:44 a.m. said:

CarysJ


Thanks for reading and leaving feedback : )

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