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The Dragons Within CarysJ

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All magic from the Welsh valleys was gone. In its place was a charred reminder that there was a wickedness in the world, a wickedness that could corrupt everyone it touched.

Anwen Morgan is in her final year at school. At sixteen her future within the small mining village of Blenthorin is all but cast in stone. She’s destined to wander the cobbled streets while her boyfriend, Bran, braces the deep darkness of the mine.

But everything changes when Anwen and best friend, Efa, notice a bright light sparkling up on the hillside during their walk home through the valleys. Following the light will not only draw them away from their chosen path but also put the people around them in grave danger.

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  • 59570 words
  • About 238 pages
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  • Tears

    5

  • Laughs

    3

  • Thrills

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7 comments on "The Dragons Within"

Eliza Rosewood on Nov. 19, 2017, 11:43 p.m. said:

Eliza Rosewood


I kept reading and couldn’t stop. This story was incredible. Such a great ending and full of betrayal and “herd mentality” and extremely an brave heroine. I’m crying as I write this because the ending was so bitter sweet. Incredible work!!!
The writing is similar to Diana Wynne Jones and it has an old fairy tale feel to it

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CarysJ on Nov. 20, 2017, 8:43 a.m. said:

CarysJ


Thanks so much for taking the time to read and for leaving some feedback, really appreciate it!

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Eliza Rosewood on Nov. 20, 2017, 9:03 a.m. said:

Eliza Rosewood


No problem! I was thinking about some constructive feedback and the big thing is maybe including some more scenes with Anwen and Ivor. Though I do trust her judgement it seemed hard to believe she would defend him when he was behind her father losing his job and such.

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Kobla on Nov. 19, 2017, 4 a.m. said:

Kobla


Interesting. Typical young folk abut their business but I think the fire was rushed and that no proper investigation was done into it doesn't pan well for me. The kids might have gone on to find out Ivor was not such a bad old man, to some happy ending.

I will leave comparisons out.

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CarysJ on Nov. 20, 2017, 8:44 a.m. said:

CarysJ


Thanks for reading and leaving feedback : )

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Kobla on Nov. 18, 2017, 2:48 p.m. said:

Kobla


Well, It has quipped my interest so far. The mining accident makes me want to see what it really is. Anwen, forgive me if I don't get the name right is in a relationship with a guy she doesn't think she loves. If it has brought me this far and keeps me guessing, there is substance to it. Let me get a bit further. Bran doesn't seem to be doing enough. He doesn't seem so much in love, just someone keeping relationship for convenience. Too early to judge though. Let's see.

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Eliza Rosewood on Nov. 17, 2017, 11:40 p.m. said:

Eliza Rosewood


So far I’m really enjoying the story and I like the main characters! The authors descriptions remind me a little bit of Diana Wynne Jones.
There are a couple of minor errors and maybe some spots that could be tightened but otherwise I really like it.

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