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Scratch That Tiana Smith

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Mia’s best friend is Cupid. No really. A teenage Cupid who went out of town and foolishly left behind her charmed journal and pen—the two items Mia needs in order to make the football hottie, Vince Demetrius, notice her.

Vince falls for her all right, but Mia doesn't count on Logan, the photographer for the school newspaper who's surprisingly suave and persistent. With two guys now after her, Mia tries to dial down the crazy by directing Logan's feelings elsewhere, namely toward her neighbor, Elena.

Yeah, too bad for Mia, her neighbor likes Vince. As if that wasn't enough, Mia has two weeks until her bestie returns. Fourteen short days to put all the right couples back together or she can kiss her perfect match goodbye forever.

But in this retelling of A Midsummer Night's Dream, the course of true love never does run smooth.

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  • 66854 words
  • About 267 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    6

  • Tears

    3

  • Laughs

    8

  • Thrills

    3

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24 comments on "Scratch That"

Skye Eastridge on Feb. 21, 2017, 12:55 a.m. said:

Skye Eastridge


Cute so far

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T. K. Yeager on Feb. 18, 2017, 3:50 p.m. said:

T. K. Yeager


Hey Tiana! Excellent writing and great book! I loved Mia's character and I super fell in love with Logan. He is SO dreamy! I was so happy that they made it together in the end since it wasn't super immediately obvious that everything was going to work out, even if I suspected it would.

My only suggestion is that the pacing did drag a little from time to time. There were scenes like the one in her dad's office where she was contemplating life and there wasn't much action or much moving the plot forward. At times like those, I prefer stories to be moving just a little more quickly, even though it provides some good character insights. Beside those slow points, I loved all of the scenes between the main characters and all of their drama. It was the perfect love triangle/square/whatever haha.
Thanks so much for sharing your story and best of luck in season 10!

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Anna K & Catherine M on Feb. 17, 2017, 5:18 p.m. said:

Anna K & Catherine M


This doesn't need any improvements, just to be published. Seriously spectacular.

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T. K. Yeager on Feb. 16, 2017, 1:40 a.m. said:

T. K. Yeager


Hey Tiana! This is a fun story so far and I like the messy love triangle your main character is getting herself into so far. It will be fun to keep reading :)

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Anna K & Catherine M on Feb. 15, 2017, 9:21 p.m. said:

Anna K & Catherine M


Let me just say... wow. I usually see grammar mistakes and stuff like that in manuscripts, but this is just kinda plain perfect. I've read the play that this is based off of, and it syncs with that really well. Really, just WOW.

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Sara.Blevins on Feb. 15, 2017, 4:28 p.m. said:

Sara.Blevins


I really liked this story and thought it was so cute. Being a fan of Shakespeare, I thought you did such a fantastic job sticking to the original material. I still would have liked a bit more character development--or maybe a few more scenes with Logan and Mia. I think that would maybe help to flesh them out a bit more.

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Sara.Blevins on Feb. 15, 2017, 11:04 a.m. said:

Sara.Blevins


I like this so far--it has a very light, upbeat tone that was a little unsettling at first. The characters are fun--but I'm excited to see more development of these characters as the narrative progresses. Definitely a fun-light-hearted read so far!

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Katie Kaleski on Feb. 2, 2017, 12:14 a.m. said:

Katie Kaleski


It's cute so far. I like the voice and the bit with the marker made me laugh. I think I already know who I'm rooting for her to end up with. Fun start!

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Karah Rachelle on Jan. 31, 2017, 6:33 p.m. said:

Karah Rachelle


Your narrative voice is adorable! It makes the story read quickly and draws the reader in. Also, I couldn't pass up a Midsummer retelling!

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Maykathryn on Jan. 29, 2017, 5:56 p.m. said:

Maykathryn


Lots of fun, and good pacing.

Reminds me a lot of the Meg Cabot style, Princess Diaries and so on.

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