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SAVING ARDEN Grace Elizabeth

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Arden Erdos’ priorities are challenged minutes after encountering Emery Thomas, a fearless outcast with a gorgeous face who left something behind. Bittersweetly, it’s not just his good looks that distract her but the fact that he predicts her impending death the first chance they meet. With this threat looming Arden attempts to find solace in her studies, but unbearable brushes with death -and Emery- continue as he tries to save her and she tries to stay away.

The twisted threads of Arden’s life begin to unravel more as she discovers that her dad has secrets of his own tied to confiscated research and an undisclosed job. In the midst of these revelations, and true to Emery’s prediction, Arden finds herself in the hospital, and this time quite possibly for good.

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  • 60047 words
  • About 240 pages
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  • Tears

    8

  • Laughs

    7

  • Thrills

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40 comments on "SAVING ARDEN"

Jen on Nov. 9, 2017, 4:03 p.m. said:

Jen


I like the plot twist and the "supernatural" aspect is unique but I feel like some of the characters need more development or could be left out completely (the stepmom) and I feel like the romance needs more development because the love at first sight thing is overplayed and it needs more depth as to why they're so in love.

The first half is for sure twilight but the second half I would say took on a more unique and original quality

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Grace Elizabeth on Nov. 11, 2017, 6:10 p.m. said:

Grace Elizabeth


Thanks so much for reading, commenting and rating, Jen! :)

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Jen on Nov. 4, 2017, 10:24 a.m. said:

Jen


The opening was pretty good to me, it caught my attention but the rest is just screaming twilight to me and I can't stand the over emphasis of how "beautiful" the boy is and there are a few grammatical errors.

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Grace Elizabeth on Nov. 5, 2017, 9:26 a.m. said:

Grace Elizabeth


Yeah, not going to lie, huge Twilight fan over here ;) Glad you liked the opening and thanks for stopping by to read!

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HollyBGolly on Nov. 3, 2017, 9:36 p.m. said:

HollyBGolly


What did I like? Easier to answer what I didn't like... which is NOTHING beyond some typographical errors, which normally make me stop reading a book. This manuscript I couldn't put down and want MORE MORE MORE. The characters were relatable from beginning to end. The storyline flowed flawlessly and the writer left you with your questions just until the point you got frustrated, then answering them in such a complete way you're completely satisfied and never feel cheated. The descriptions of characters and scenery, and even injuries and auras is so complete without being too much. I never found myself skipping over them. I positively can not wait to read more in this series! A definite up and coming author to watch out for.

It's difficult to compare, but if you love Bree Dispain, Lola St Vil, Rachel Caine's Marganville Vampires, Simon Holt, or P.C. Cast... you will thoroughly enjoy this book as well.

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Grace Elizabeth on Nov. 5, 2017, 9:25 a.m. said:

Grace Elizabeth


Holly, this comment has made my day! Wow! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and leaving such an encouraging comment :)

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HollyBGolly on Nov. 3, 2017, 4:23 p.m. said:

HollyBGolly


I must admit that I'm really enjoying this manuscript. I'm certainly hooked and ready to keep reading. It's well written and catchy from the first sentence. It's leaving me with tons of questions just begging to be answered. What happened to to her mom? What happened to his parents? Is he really getting a large inheritance? The only improvement I can suggest is this... The boy tells her she's going to die and then asks her not to die, and it seems she's so obsessed with his looks that she's completely forgotten that conversation. A small section of internal dialog might help to make this seem more believable. Other than that, I can't wait to see what happens next!

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HollyBGolly on Nov. 3, 2017, 4:26 p.m. said:

HollyBGolly


And no sooner did I mention him telling her she was going to die and her seeming to ignore it.... BAM beginning of chapter 4 fixed it. You ma'am are a mind reader! Okay, back to chapter 4, because I'm officially addicted to this story!

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Squirrel Pants on Oct. 30, 2017, 7:57 p.m. said:

Squirrel Pants


Such a nicely written story with lots of intrigue that kept me reading. I liked how enigmatic Emery was and how he tied into everything. The mystery of her impending death was interesting to read about. Same with all the ways it almost happened. Great story. Oh and the end!!!!!
I'd say Twilight and/or the Shiver books.

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Grace Elizabeth on Nov. 5, 2017, 9:28 a.m. said:

Grace Elizabeth


Thanks so much for reading and commenting, Squirrel Pants!!!! :) Loving the comps ;)

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