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Rise Amanda Zelaya

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Princess Adeline of Alteria spends every night fearing her brother will decide to end her life. Sister or not, a dead rival proves much less messy than one with the ability to whisper revolution in your opponent’s ears. She has grown into a young woman ready to fight. The time has come to fight back.

Now, at the insistence of her father’s most trusted advisor, Adeline flees Alteria to build an army and rage war against her oppressor. At least, that is the plan until a set of unforeseen circumstances place Adeline in the court of her country’s most formidable enemy forcing Adeline to assume the identity of her best friend in order to escape alive. Adeline struggles to convince the royal family to release her from the confinement of court while battling her growing attraction to Crowned Prince Frederick, the ruggedly handsome heir.

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  • 73248 words
  • About 293 pages
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12 comments on "Rise"

Gg908 on Sept. 2, 2017, 8:38 p.m. said:

Gg908


😀😀

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Taylor.Cole on Aug. 26, 2017, 12:37 a.m. said:

Taylor.Cole


I love the story and the characters. There are a few typos here and there, but i like the overall direction the plot is taking. Awesome job!

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shehe on July 11, 2017, 10:53 a.m. said:

shehe


Story's been good so far. There were a few typos here and there. Other than that, I could certainly do with less talking inside MC's head. That makes it more boring, and makes me skip paragraphs of descriptions. But that is just my opinion.

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Amanda Zelaya on July 11, 2017, 1:02 p.m. said:

Amanda Zelaya


Thanks for reading and for your feedback! Will definitely take it into consideration during next edits.

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fairer3333 on July 10, 2017, 9:09 p.m. said:

fairer3333


Try and keep the brother's name straight. Also, a bit more of an introduction to Tarkan would be very helpful in foreshadowing what is to come. I must say I love the idea of Frederick and Adeline getting married and ruling Alteria & Ethica.

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fairer3333 on July 10, 2017, 8:14 p.m. said:

fairer3333


It's great so far, definitely worth publishing. I would include more background on Alteria, Ethica, and her brother & father. Maybe a prologue of some sort to help better introduce the characters and setting.

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Amanda Zelaya on July 11, 2017, 1:02 p.m. said:

Amanda Zelaya


Thanks for reading and for your thoughtful comments! I'm glad you enjoyed.

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Dorothy A. Winsor on July 9, 2017, 1:05 p.m. said:

Dorothy A. Winsor


I like the way the story starts with action that matters and yet manages to engage us with the POV character. The story summary sounds wonderful, and story trumps pretty much everything else. However, at the moment, the story's punch is lessened for me by some rough spots in the writing. I'm not talking about basic stuff, because the writer has control of language. I'm talking about the next level up. I hate to see that because, as I said, the story has potential. Forgive the presumption, but I found Browne and King's SELF-EDITING FOR FICTION WRITERS useful and maybe this writer would too.

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Amanda Zelaya on July 10, 2017, 11:35 a.m. said:

Amanda Zelaya


Dorthy, thank you for the feedback; I appreciate you taking the time.

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KyraMNelson on June 27, 2017, 4:45 p.m. said:

KyraMNelson


I love a book with lots of political intrigue, so this was a fun read for me!

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