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Pete and Daisy Tani Hanes

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Pete and Daisy are seniors at Columbia University, in NYC. Daisy is pregnant, and needs a baby daddy, pronto, so her old-fashioned granny won't think badly of her, and Pete is an exchange student from Italy who needs a place to live. Can a marriage of convenience, a marriage in name only, solve their problems? They move into the third floor apartment of granny's brownstone and prepare to breeze through their charade. They just didn't know how much the two little words "I do" would change things.
They begin to like each other, then love each other, then realize they can't live without each other, though they can't seem to tell each other any of this. There are hurt feelings and misunderstandings, a long walk in a rainstorm, a treacherous ex, a loud Italian family, and of course, a lovely baby.
Come see how a modern family is born.

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  • About 291 pages
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  • Tears

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  • Laughs

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  • Thrills

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17 comments on "Pete and Daisy"

Shraddha on May 30, 2017, 2:24 p.m. said:

Shraddha


The story was beautifully written though the misunderstandings between the main characters could have been cleared earlier.

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Shraddha on May 28, 2017, 10:03 a.m. said:

Shraddha


Very beautiful plotline..loving it

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Tani Hanes on May 28, 2017, 8:01 p.m. said:

Tani Hanes


Thank you! This began as an exercise to get away from first person POV, but these guys turned into so much more! I really fell in love with them, and I miss them so much :o) I'm so happy when readers like them, too...

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T. K. Yeager on May 12, 2017, 1:37 p.m. said:

T. K. Yeager


Hey Tani!

I finally had the time to finish your book! I know Tani's already said this, but a warning to those possibly reading this book in the future: it has many explicit sex scenes, so if that's not your thing, this book won't be for you. Also, SPOILERS BELOW.

My favorite things about your book was the fact that Pete cared so much about Daisy and also I loved his family. They were all so touching, loving and accepting of Daisy during her pregnancy. It was nice to see people not hating on her or shaming her for getting pregnant at a young age.

A few areas I can see for improvement: I got confused between the perspective switches. Although it's written in 3rd person, the main voice switches between Pete and Daisy within a chapter and with no warning. It took me out of the story many times as I got confused with who was actually speaking/thinking at the time.

As much as I enjoyed and fell in love with Pete's character, I feel like he didn't have any flaws so it made him a little unrealistic. His only flaw was that he had a crazy ex, but don't we all?

Also it really bummed me out whenever Daisy was so self deprecating about her promiscuity. She was a strong girl and I wish she would have had a little more self confidence. Also, it super freaked me out whenever she had sex with a random guy without a condom. As one of the other commenters mentioned, baby + STD = terrifying!!

One last question I did have, did they ever tell Pete's family that the baby wasn't actually his? Will their kids know that they're only half siblings? I know you have a sequel, so perhaps those questions are answered there.

Oh! And lastly, I think a different title may help grab more readers right of the bat. Something like: The Fake Baby Daddy or A Fake Husband for a Real Baby.

Thanks so much for sharing your book!

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T. K. Yeager on April 25, 2017, 9:43 a.m. said:

T. K. Yeager


Just after Chapter 3 so far. I'm enjoyed your characters. They are believable college students and your writing is clear and to the point. I think sometimes it can be a little rushed and you could do more description in your surroundings.

One of my major questions is who is the baby daddy? I feel like you might have mentioned him at some point, but that's a big part of Daisy's life so I think it might be better if that was discussed in the first three chapters.

I would have LOVED to see the scene where she had to tell her grandma that she was pregnant and make up the married lie. That would be dramatic and comedic I bet.

Maybe you're planning this in the future, but I also think a fake "date" between Pietro and Daisy would have been helpful for each other and the readers to get to know both of them a little better.

That's my two cents so far. Reading on!

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Barnes22 on April 24, 2017, 6:28 p.m. said:

Barnes22


It's really good. I wouldn't really change much. May b a little more flirting between Pete and daisy

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Megrose81 on April 19, 2017, 1:18 a.m. said:

Megrose81


I think it is great so far! There are some basic editing errors, and dialogue could flow more smoothly in some spots, and have more of a natural feel; but I think the story is very intriguing and gripping and the characters feel real.

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Tani Hanes on April 20, 2017, 6:38 p.m. said:

Tani Hanes


Ooh, please tell me where the "editing errors" are; I know the formatting got screwed up and I lost a lot of the italics and stuff, but it sounds like you're talking about bigger issues? I hate having errors in my work, and I'd like to fix it ASAP...

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suziehp on April 18, 2017, 9:20 p.m. said:

suziehp


I really like it! I like the characters and the way they interact. The dialogue flows very well and most of the time I can really SEE what is happening.
On a small side note - Daisy seems to be okay with unprotected sex and I'm distracted by that. (I'm picturing STD issues coupled with pregnancy - yikes!)

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Tani Hanes on April 20, 2017, 6:40 p.m. said:

Tani Hanes


You're right, we def live in a "condom every time" world. But Daisy is pregnant, so she obviously doesn't show the best judgement in these circumstances....

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