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Pete and Daisy Tani Hanes

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Pete and Daisy are seniors at Columbia University, in NYC. Daisy is pregnant, and needs a baby daddy, pronto, so her old-fashioned granny won't think badly of her, and Pete is an exchange student from Italy who needs a place to live. Can a marriage of convenience, a marriage in name only, solve their problems? They move into the third floor apartment of granny's brownstone and prepare to breeze through their charade. They just didn't know how much the two little words "I do" would change things.
They begin to like each other, then love each other, then realize they can't live without each other, though they can't seem to tell each other any of this. There are hurt feelings and misunderstandings, a long walk in a rainstorm, a treacherous ex, a loud Italian family, and of course, a lovely baby.
Come see how a modern family is born.

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  • About 291 pages
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    10

  • Tears

    7

  • Laughs

    7

  • Thrills

    4

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22 comments on "Pete and Daisy"

Simonne Jacqueline on July 31, 2017, 7:26 p.m. said:

Simonne Jacqueline


This is such a sweet story that I thoroughly enjoyed reading! The plot is quite simple and straightforward, with no major twists or turns. At times it's predictable, but it's so wonderfully written that I was quite content to go right along with it. Some of my favourite things about the story are the characters. I feel like the bad boy is such a popular idea, and while it can be well done, it can be also be a bit repetitive. However, Pete is such a GOOD guy, and very sexy. He's the first "good" guy I've ever read as a main character that I didn't find boring. And as for Daisy, although I don't relate to her personality or um...sexual habits, I found her thoughts and feelings to be really relatable! Whenever things happened, I found myself thinking the same things as her. All in all, a pleasant light read! Well done Tani, and thanks for sharing! x

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anarogutz73 on July 25, 2017, 10:48 p.m. said:

anarogutz73


This story it's awesome.. I love it..

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Tifani.Allen on July 15, 2017, 1:23 a.m. said:

Tifani.Allen


This book is awesome. It's smart, it's funny, and truly touches your heart. I cried a few times. Everyone needs a Pete in their life!!!

Similar Stories : Nothing. I feel as if its original.

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docistheboss on July 13, 2017, 2:43 p.m. said:

docistheboss


Wonderful book! I fell in love with Pete and Daisy! Pete is such a wonderful man. <3 I want to read everything this author writes. Honestly, she's so talented! I don't have anything bad to say about the story. It's perfect the way it is.

I honestly don't know what book I could compare it to. It's been a long time since I had a story that I loved everything about it and this one has everything. I felt all emotions possible but mostly, I cried my heart out and smiled and laughed out loud. Seriously, this book is pure magic!

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Shannnxoxo on July 11, 2017, 10:08 p.m. said:

Shannnxoxo


I love how the writer reels you in to every scene, as if you are right there in the thick of it. Relatable characters and realistic issues. Tani is an awesome writer.

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Shraddha on May 30, 2017, 2:24 p.m. said:

Shraddha


The story was beautifully written though the misunderstandings between the main characters could have been cleared earlier.

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Shraddha on May 28, 2017, 10:03 a.m. said:

Shraddha


Very beautiful plotline..loving it

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Tani Hanes on May 28, 2017, 8:01 p.m. said:

Tani Hanes


Thank you! This began as an exercise to get away from first person POV, but these guys turned into so much more! I really fell in love with them, and I miss them so much :o) I'm so happy when readers like them, too...

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T. K. Yeager on May 12, 2017, 1:37 p.m. said:

T. K. Yeager


Hey Tani!

I finally had the time to finish your book! I know Tani's already said this, but a warning to those possibly reading this book in the future: it has many explicit sex scenes, so if that's not your thing, this book won't be for you. Also, SPOILERS BELOW.

My favorite things about your book was the fact that Pete cared so much about Daisy and also I loved his family. They were all so touching, loving and accepting of Daisy during her pregnancy. It was nice to see people not hating on her or shaming her for getting pregnant at a young age.

A few areas I can see for improvement: I got confused between the perspective switches. Although it's written in 3rd person, the main voice switches between Pete and Daisy within a chapter and with no warning. It took me out of the story many times as I got confused with who was actually speaking/thinking at the time.

As much as I enjoyed and fell in love with Pete's character, I feel like he didn't have any flaws so it made him a little unrealistic. His only flaw was that he had a crazy ex, but don't we all?

Also it really bummed me out whenever Daisy was so self deprecating about her promiscuity. She was a strong girl and I wish she would have had a little more self confidence. Also, it super freaked me out whenever she had sex with a random guy without a condom. As one of the other commenters mentioned, baby + STD = terrifying!!

One last question I did have, did they ever tell Pete's family that the baby wasn't actually his? Will their kids know that they're only half siblings? I know you have a sequel, so perhaps those questions are answered there.

Oh! And lastly, I think a different title may help grab more readers right of the bat. Something like: The Fake Baby Daddy or A Fake Husband for a Real Baby.

Thanks so much for sharing your book!

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T. K. Yeager on April 25, 2017, 9:43 a.m. said:

T. K. Yeager


Just after Chapter 3 so far. I'm enjoyed your characters. They are believable college students and your writing is clear and to the point. I think sometimes it can be a little rushed and you could do more description in your surroundings.

One of my major questions is who is the baby daddy? I feel like you might have mentioned him at some point, but that's a big part of Daisy's life so I think it might be better if that was discussed in the first three chapters.

I would have LOVED to see the scene where she had to tell her grandma that she was pregnant and make up the married lie. That would be dramatic and comedic I bet.

Maybe you're planning this in the future, but I also think a fake "date" between Pietro and Daisy would have been helpful for each other and the readers to get to know both of them a little better.

That's my two cents so far. Reading on!

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