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Once Upon A Slumber Melinda Mulder

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On her way home on an unassuming night, a young girl is put to sleep for 1,000 years. Having no idea who did this or why Gretchel is taken in by two goblin brothers. To protect those she has come to care for, she will embark on a magical adventure crossing dark and perilous lands in an attempt to unravel the mysteries behind her existence. Meet dangerous foes and magical allies as the last human fights to return to her home.

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  • 107621 words
  • About 430 pages
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2 comments on "Once Upon A Slumber"

Kireon on Jan. 16, 2017, 1:21 a.m. said:

Kireon


Be on the look out for grammar and punctuation. (Comma use and semi-colon in particular will be useful to help break up the short sentences here. Think of sentences as music; short choppy notes get a little tedious, add longer notes and let the music go rise and fall naturally.)

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Melinda Mulder on Jan. 18, 2017, 5:19 a.m. said:

Melinda Mulder


Are you still fairly early in the story? Many of the short sentences were used to help the reader feel the short and simple-minded mentality of the protagonist early on, though it can be difficult to pick up on since little information is given out about her or her personality early on. As the story focuses more on the supporting cast and later after she gets a bit more educated the writing style and the character change significantly. Though, it can be a bit grating at first if you're hoping for a more involved reading and might have been a very double-edged sword for me to have used as a strategy. The idea was to help a younger audience with a shorter attention-span get involved with a story that opens to more depth in the second part (less than a quarter of the way through).

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