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mix feelings of Melissa and Levi amyahmedx

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The new boy came from japan to America to start a new journey of high school life and once he saw Melissa it was love at first sight. As year pass their relationship becomes rough and soon turns to a ending point.

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  • 429 words
  • About 2 pages
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4 comments on "mix feelings of Melissa and Levi"

Reina Galí on June 18, 2017, 2:03 a.m. said:

Reina Galí


Well... this was cute and I'm guessing you are rather young. So keep writing, but expand what you write. Take classes. Keep learning. I look forward to lengthier, edited pieces in the future.

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NicoleLambertAuthor on June 4, 2017, 2:53 a.m. said:

NicoleLambertAuthor


First of all, this book was way too short to even be considered for publishing by Swoonreads or anything. Second of all, the way this book was written literally had me questioning if the author of this book wrote it seriously or as a joke. If the latter is true, then I apologize, so please ignore this comment. However, if this book was indeed written with a serious intent, then it needs a massive amount of work. The characters were very two-dimensional, the way the book was written was very immature, and this book was also littered with typos to the point where such typos distracted me from the actual reading.

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amyahmedx on June 20, 2017, 5:01 p.m. said:

amyahmedx


well it's your fault reading in the first place

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NicoleLambertAuthor on July 8, 2017, 1:40 p.m. said:

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Okay, 1. I didn't know this wasn't completed yet, considering this is Swoon Reads and not Wattpad, and therefore, you're kind of supposed to submit an entire manuscript on here, but that's beside the point.

2. If you're going to submit your work anywhere, you have to be open to criticism. Not everyone is going to like your work, and that's okay. Responding with "Well, it's your fault for reading it in the first place" is highly unprofessional and in all honesty tells me you're not ready to take part in the publishing industry.

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