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Lies of Golden Straw - An End of Ever After Story E. L. Tenenbaum

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The Miller's daughter never had a name, not until her first day of school when a magical boy named Merlin gave her one. From then on, she was his Millie, and would remain so until...

...The Miller, a known liar, told his most infamous lie of all. Word that his daughter spins straw into gold travels straight to the king, who sends for Millie to see if this is true. Trapped by her father's lie, Millie is desperate for a magic that even Merlin doesn't have.

Then, a little man appears and offers to help, for a small price. Millie agrees, but soon finds herself in too deep, unwilling to pay. Graciously, he offers her a simple way out; all she needs is a name, the very thing she never had.

The promise of a new life that glitters much like gold forces Millie to make an important decision; admit the truth or become a liar, too.

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  • 86226 words
  • About 345 pages
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2 comments on "Lies of Golden Straw - An End of Ever After Story"

Samantha Hastings on July 28, 2017, 11:09 a.m. said:

Samantha Hastings


I love fairytale retellings and I like your new spin. The only suggestion I have is to not tell it in past tense. There would be more suspense and interest if it were present tense and no spoilers.

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Svail on July 27, 2017, 4:16 a.m. said:

Svail


Absolutely loved it!! The mix of millie's conflicting emotions, and the gradual continuation of the conflict between millie and the little wizard, made for the perfect mix between whimsical and drama. I did feel as the second half of the story was a bit rushed, and I would have loved to seen more of the king's emotions about the lack of an heir, Millie's learning how to live as a queen, as well as a bit more of their relationship. As a whole however, this was an incredible read, that I very much enjoyed!!

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