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JOURNAL Brigette Barto

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Tori has always been the nerd in school. She’s on the chess team, in band, and her favorite musicians are Mozart and Beethoven. Deep down, though, she secretly desires to be popular. And when the beautiful and popular Alyssa moves into town, she takes Tori under her wing and introduces her into the world she’s always wanted to be a part of. But how far is Tori willing to go to get what she wants? And how much of herself will she lose in the process?

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  • 43842 words
  • About 175 pages
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1 comment on "JOURNAL"

strathbun on Dec. 6, 2017, 9:29 p.m. said:

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The writing style makes it feel as though I'm actually reading a 17 year-old girl's journal, & I love it. it definitely feels like I'm inside the protagonist's head. The family is very sweet and I'm intrigued by what Alyssa's story is--where did she come from, does she really have her own apartment, etc. The only thing I'd like to see is possibly some more character development for Kyle--I feel like he's kind of just an extra, random friend right now. Some more scenes with these three amigos would be cool.

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