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His Princess Ade Lanumi

Description

Meet Aurora Winters, a perky, innocent, seventeen-year-old loner.

Meet Jeremiah Summers, an ever angry, anti-social, eighteen-year-old loner.

What happens when their paths cross? Will "Sleeping Beauty" find her happily ever after?

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  • 59010 words
  • About 236 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    5

  • Tears

    5

  • Laughs

    8

  • Thrills

    6

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14 comments on "His Princess"

IDKseeya on Nov. 12, 2017, 4:35 a.m. said:

IDKseeya


I loved how in the beginning aroura and jer were like frenemies but then they warmed up to each other. and how aroura looked passed all of his flaws. I don't think that there could be any way to improve this book.

Similar Stories : I would compare this book to mainly just the typical high school cliches were they hate each other but they actually care for each other.

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IDKseeya on Nov. 12, 2017, 3:08 a.m. said:

IDKseeya


I love how you put in details. You are just overall a great writer and I would totally buy this book.

I would not compare this book to any other one because each book is different and great in their own ways there is no point in comparing them.

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Intellectual_idiots on Nov. 8, 2017, 9:07 p.m. said:

Intellectual_idiots


Liked it, very cute.

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Intellectual_idiots on Nov. 8, 2017, 9:06 p.m. said:

Intellectual_idiots


It was cute but it had quite a few mistakes. (Good for people that like a cliche)

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bremcfarland on Nov. 6, 2017, 4:42 p.m. said:

bremcfarland


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Jennifer Bellevue on Oct. 29, 2017, 7:23 a.m. said:

Jennifer Bellevue


I didn't have time today to get through the whole novel but I wanted to write a quick note to let you know what I think so far.

I love how Aurora seems like the stereotypical Disney princess but you've thrown her into the real world. I think it's interesting to see how someone with such a sweet and sunny disposition would fare in the real world. The happy song had me smiling straight away.

I like the tension you've created so far between Aurora and Simran and Aurora and Jer. The tension there kept me hooked.

In your next pass over His Princess maybe focus in on grammar and dialogue formatting. There are some good things out there online that help. I know I've had to use them a lot!

Good luck.

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Alanya on Oct. 29, 2017, 12:21 a.m. said:

Alanya


Grammar just needs to be checked

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e ditton on Oct. 26, 2017, 4:48 p.m. said:

e ditton


I'm only through 3 chapters but I think your characters have a great energy and feel relatable. I find that the use of italics and exclamation marks throughout can be a little distracting (your story/characters don't need this extra "help" in my opinion!), but this is tiny. overall, fun to read :)

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Olivia D on Oct. 18, 2017, 11:26 p.m. said:

Olivia D


I love it so far. The protagonist is very likeable, and the pace is great. I imagine it is only going to get better from here.

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Intellectual_idiots on Oct. 10, 2017, 10:37 p.m. said:

Intellectual_idiots


A good story and plot though a lot of edits in need and grammar and sentence structure needs to be fixed.
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