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Forbidden Games Wes Loder


At age 12, Peter Bain had been sexually abused by a beloved coach. When he reported the abuse, the coach accused him of lying then killed himself. A pariah in his school and a liar to his parents, a cynical Peter speaks only to those who believe him.
Just before his junior year, Peter discovers that a late great-aunt has left him secret financial resources—and a mission. Encouraged, Peter goes out for volleyball—the one sport that his father had forbade him to play.
Then he meets Marty, a hidden survivor and liar. Smitten, Peter courts her, and she convinces the current coach to let him play. His playing then carries the team through the district playoffs.
Finding Peter, in turn, gives Marty the courage to free herself from a sexual abuser, setting in motion deadly events that lead to a climax in a district justice’s courtroom.


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3 comments on "Forbidden Games"

Bookish girl 44 on June 1, 2017, 4:01 p.m. said:

Bookish girl 44

Just wasn't my cup of tea

It's uniquely its own

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Kristy Brown on April 1, 2017, 10:45 a.m. said:

Kristy Brown

This wasn't my usual type of read. Saying that, it was cleverly thought out with great details.
The author did a great job of making me dislike the parents! How could they side against him like that? Liked the brother relationship very much.
Improvements: maybe to make the main character's physical appearance more obvious from the beginning. Also, sometimes the match scoring became a little repetitive. The second half of the book got a little heavy with the background of Marty but not so much to put me off.
This was a different sort of read for me which was obviously brilliantly written and thoroughly planned out.
Thank you for sharing your story. X

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Kristy Brown on Feb. 25, 2017, 8:40 a.m. said:

Kristy Brown

I'm at the 25% mark and wanted to leave a few thoughts. I already knew from reading your last story what a strong, effortless writer you are.
I feel like I haven't got a strong mental image of your main character yet.
Also the first few chapters are full of detail and back story that I felt slightly overwhelmed at times. I felt hooked in from the school chapter.
Liking Marty a lot and looking forward to see how they connect.
I haven't read many books with this theme so I'm intrigued to see where it leads me. Your blurb had me wanting answers. Enjoying it so far. :)

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