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Emergent Jenn Bridgwater

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After being saved by two mysterious boys with strangely glowing hands from a near attack outside the café where she works, Thea’s already stressful life spirals out of control as she discovers her heritage and destiny.
When James appears at her school, the immediate magnetic pull Thea feels towards him scares and electrifies her, especially when she realises that he and his friends are not quite right.
Thea is thrown into James’ world of Elementals, those who can control the elements to benefit humankind, and she is relentlessly hunted for her blood by a rogue Elemental bent on becoming immortal.
Struggling to reconcile her normal life and the strange pull the Elemental world has on her, Thea is terrified that her mortal friends will be a casualty of a war that both she and they know nothing about.

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  • About 320 pages
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    6

  • Tears

    3

  • Laughs

    6

  • Thrills

    7

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15 comments on "Emergent"

Wilf Gibson on Jan. 10, 2018, 6:52 p.m. said:

Wilf Gibson


I've had more time to think about this story since I read it and I'd like to mention some things that I forgot to mention. First off: I read the last 36% of this book in one session. I couldn't stop. What I remember fondly is the first quarter where Thea and James (still remember the names) are just getting into the swing of things and everything is fun. FUN. Remember that in stories? Looking back, I'm a little disappointed that the Air Fishers don't reappear later into the story, they're such a weird part of the world and I wished that more things in this story were flat-out weird like that. Can't wait to read more from you.

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Jenn Bridgwater on Jan. 12, 2018, 3:14 a.m. said:

Jenn Bridgwater


Hi Wilf, I'm revising and editing and hopefully making things better, and all of your comments are so helpful. One of the things I'm working on is the weird Air Fishers and getting more of them flopping around!

I'm beyond excited that you're still thinking about James and Thea, and my little story!

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Emily Matis on Dec. 27, 2017, 2:56 p.m. said:

Emily Matis


It left me wanting more. Yearning for more heated romance between all of them. I need to know what happens next. I love the chemistry between James and Thea; and the cute, bubbly relationship between Caleb and Jemima. There is so much potential riding on this book - and like I said before - you are gifted. The plot line was amazing. The names, places, and powers are amazing. Not to say there weren't some errors or mishaps. Maybe add more action to the dialogue; show don't tell. Make the characters even more 3D. Honestly, I love this book.

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Jenn Bridgwater on Dec. 29, 2017, 6:22 a.m. said:

Jenn Bridgwater


Thanks so much Emily! I'm so glad you liked it. I will certainly take on board your comments about dialogue and characterisation when I come to revising/redrafting.

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Emily Matis on Dec. 25, 2017, 12:33 p.m. said:

Emily Matis


I absolutely love this story. You're a gifted writer and I cannot wait for this book to become published. The detail for the characters are spot on. Raven hair and emerald green eyes - perfect. The tingle coming from the triangle birthmark - a bit of awesomeness. I love the friendship between Thea (Theadora), Jemima, and Evan and the conflicting encounters with James and his girlfriend. Your indirect and direct characterization is beautifully done. I was intrigued when I first read the synopsis or summary - and the moment I started reading your book - I was hooked. Sarcasm - check. Humor - check. Girls being girls - check. Guys being guys - check. Enticing -yeah. The plot line is impeccable and the characters give your book life. I love, love, love your story so far.

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Jenn Bridgwater on Dec. 27, 2017, 9:09 a.m. said:

Jenn Bridgwater


Wow! What a lovely review - I hope you like the rest of it as well. Thank you for taking the time to read it.

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Emily Matis on Dec. 27, 2017, 1:44 p.m. said:

Emily Matis


I can hardly put down this book. I am thrilled it is a series. The conflict. The relationships. I'm totally shipping Caleb and Jemima and Erin with Evan. Petra cannot be trusted - there's something about her. Rowan - can't be trusted. This story is wonderfully written and I am glad I have read it.

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Wilf Gibson on Nov. 27, 2017, 6:09 p.m. said:

Wilf Gibson


Almost all of this book is 'the good part' of the book. The first three quarters fly by, they're entertaining and fun, the characters are fantastic (I even remembered all of their names!) and the interpersonal drama is well polished and well put together. This is the most crucial part of the story and Jenn nails it. The prose isn't the best ever, but it flows and rarely distracts - I wouldn't mess with it too much, maybe another proofread. The scenes between Thea and her friends are a delight to read, and I even realised that I missed them when Thea goes away to Charnock for a few days. Thea herself is a fleshed out character who has responsibilities like her job, her apartment, her car, despite being a high-schooler, and because of the way the characters are written we care about these things alongside her and want to see her succeed in managing her life. James is presented as a charming bad-boy who keeps threatening to flip her world upside down, and even though Thea (and we) want them to get together, we understand the cost and feel that drama as well. Holy cow, this story is AMAZING during the first half. Once the initial (and short) info-dump about Elementals and Charnock are over, most of the scenes that take place in the Elemental HQ are good. Characters are fleshed out, Thea gets to learn about her powers and improve, and we get a sense of what an Elemental can do. The world of Charnock is strangely empty though, we don't get any sense of cooks or receptionists or janitors, let alone how many people actually make up this group of immortal beings. While it's fantastic when the Circle get sent out to deal with Maron and his goons, you kind of have to wonder whether or not Rowan has any special ops teams or whatever that he can send out. The combat isn't flashy but it feels chaotic and has impact. It's one of the things that made me sit up and think "damn, this story might be able to pull off something incredible."

Where the story disappoints is pretty much anything to do with Charnock and Ethan and the overall plot. There are two twists at the end of the story that really soured it for me, one regarding the resolution of an interesting romantic development which just can't help but feel like a cop-out, and the other is a character's secret agenda that I immediately saw coming. Moreover, the climax of the story seems like it's just there because we need a big climax, and none of the character interactions that fuel it feel earned. The climactic showdown not only feels kind of goofy, but it doesn't have a satisfying resolution. I think this comes about because of a misunderstanding of the plot. It's not about Ethan's threat to the Elemental status quo, most of the story is focused on the relationship between Thea and James, and to a broader extent relationships in general. So many of the characters are vivid and a joy to read about, but none of that stuff turns up when the story goes into plot mode. The climax revolves around the complex and estranged relationship between two characters who've had next to no face-time with Thea or the audience. If the villain had had more to do then it might have been more dramatic, but I don't understand why Ethan didn't just try to win Thea over to his side. An elixir that would restore people to life for, what, maybe a shot-glass full of blood? If he'd just asked Thea wouldn't have known better.

I loved this book, I recommend it, particularly the first half. I'm gonna remember this when I have to do edits of the flow of my "characters talking" scenes. Best thing I've read on this site.

Similar Stories : Like if Twilight were written by a competent person.

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Wilf Gibson on Nov. 27, 2017, 6:09 p.m. said:

Wilf Gibson


Wow, sorry about the formatting.

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Jenn Bridgwater on Nov. 28, 2017, 2:16 a.m. said:

Jenn Bridgwater


Thank you so much for reviewing, Wilf. I'm so glad you enjoyed it mostly - now you've pointed out your frustrations, I can see them clearly in the MS and when it comes to rewriting I'll keep them in mind. I completely see what you mean about Ethan = you're right, Ethan and Thea don't get any face time. And about the romantic thing - I'll have a think about that as well! I suppose Charnock is a bit barren, and that's definitely something I'll remedy next time round.
I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment, it's so nice of you - and you've really made my day! Those positive sentences are going to follow me around!
I'll be looking out for yours - I hope you'll publish it on here!

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