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Eden Tracey Joseph

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Sixteen-year-old Ivy Farewell has never seen the phantom of Eden Woods but that hasn’t stopped her yearnings. She breaks curfew one night while her parents are asleep. Along with her best friend Margaret, she sets out to prove the legend false and to maybe get a peek at the boy who’s fooled everyone and captured her heart. When Ivy and Margaret end up lost, their only hope is in each other. When Ivy falls ill with a fever, a strange boy takes them in and tends to her. Overtaken by a new illness, affection of the heart, Ivy must find a way to free herself and Margaret from his hold on them if she ever wants to go home.

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  • 50107 words
  • About 200 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    7

  • Tears

    8

  • Laughs

    3

  • Thrills

    10

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15 comments on "Eden"

HxH on June 22, 2017, 1:37 a.m. said:

HxH


This was an intriguing read, and not like anything I usually see in YA. It was creepy and suspenseful, and at times there was a dreamy, hazy quality to it that made me feel lulled under a spell just like Ivy and Margaret. I loved the imagery and atmosphere, and the "Ivy of my heart". I love that he stole their hearts. Your story opens with descriptions of passionate kissing and Ivy's longing for the boy in the woods who calls out to her (which I loved, and it pulled me in immediately). When she meets him, she feels that jolt of heat and intense attraction, and it led me to think there was going to be more between Phillip and Ivy physically. It seems like they're just regular friends/housemates once Ivy and Margaret are under his spell, and Ivy's powerful draw to him fades. Where did those feelings of powerful romantic attraction go? Personally, I'd love to see some steamy scenes between them - but that's just my opinion, so take it with a grain of salt. He'd been calling out to her for so long. Why her particularly? And how did he know their middle names? What exactly did he want from them? You could spend some time on those points, and I'd also like to see the ending come to a more natural taper. It's a bit abrupt. You don't have to tell us if the girls ever make it out of the woods, or what happens with Manderley, but following that death at the end, there could be a few extra paragraphs; maybe the girls make a grave for him next to Nora's, or something about the woods changes, like an enchantment lifting. Something to give us closure and bring it full circle. This was so eerie and chilling in the best way, and one of my favorite portrayals of faerie. I felt like I was right there in the story being suffocated by Phillip's horrible magic. It was so vividmy written and beautifully otherworldly. I will definitely be thinking about Eden the next time I find myself in the woods. Thank you for sharing this with us!

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Tracey Joseph on June 22, 2017, 11 a.m. said:

Tracey Joseph


Hello! Thank you so much for taking the time to read my work to the end. Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts with me too. You've certainly helped me see my story in a new light. :)

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HxH on June 21, 2017, 4:30 p.m. said:

HxH


I'm enjoying this so far. Your storytelling is very beautiful - atmospheric and haunting. As the reader I'm planted firmly inside Ivy's body, feeling what she feels. You've mastered writing with all of the senses and I like your particular author voice; it feels warm and rich and close even when weaving together a spooky setting. Reading on!~

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Tracey Joseph on June 21, 2017, 4:48 p.m. said:

Tracey Joseph


Thanks for reading my work! Your comments are too kind. Sometimes it's hard for me to believe that anyone would like my writing, but your kinds words have made me feel better. :)

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Reina Galí on June 19, 2017, 11:12 p.m. said:

Reina Galí


I love so much about this book. It's just utterly fantastic--the language, the descriptions, the characters. I loved the interactions and the relationship between the three. The ending, I'm unsure of. It was too sudden, too loose. I'd like more there--the death just didn't seem to fit. I agree that I don't quite understand whose side Manderley is on.
I think you should work on the ending, but I honest to god think this is publishing quality. I think this book should get chosen, and I wish you all the luck in the world.

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Tracey Joseph on June 21, 2017, 4:45 p.m. said:

Tracey Joseph


Thanks again for taking the time to read my work. I will definitely rethink that ending and Manderley's motivations during my next revision. Thank you for the well wishes. Good luck to you as well. :)

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Reina Galí on June 19, 2017, 9:16 p.m. said:

Reina Galí


I am so into this. So so so into this. I have no complaints so far--love the girls. Love the forest. Your descriptions are just on point. I'm down.

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Tracey Joseph on June 21, 2017, 4:43 p.m. said:

Tracey Joseph


Thank you so much, Reina! :)

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Cassie Rose on May 14, 2017, 11:59 p.m. said:

Cassie Rose


What a fantastic book! I got so sucked into the mind games of this book that I found myself pulling out my phone at every chance, even standing in line at the store, so that I could read it. The dark suspense of the book kept me locked in as Phillip wove his web over the girls. One of the things I really loved about this book was that you were never quite sure if supernatural things were happening, or if it was just the fevered and paranoid workings of a kidnapped girl's mind. I also really enjoyed that there was a female friendship in this book, that I think a lot of other readers would love to see as well. Both of the girls felt really developed, and I really appreciated that Margaret wasn't simply there to make Ivy look good (as many friends in YA books are). I think the unique and interesting premise of this book stands out as a breath of fresh air, something that will bring you deep into a complex and suspenseful game of love and fear.

My suggestions for the next draft would be two important things, and one small thing. I think that sometimes transitions weren't made long enough, or not made at all, and it was a bit confusing. They'd be talking about one thing, and then suddenly Phillip would change the subject to a completely unrelated topic. The other thing (SPOILER ALERT) was that I didn't understand why the red ribbons triggered Ivy to come out of Phillip's spell? I couldn't follow the train of logic. Why were there two of them, and why did that snap her into reality? Why did Manderley bring her the ribbon if she was on Phillip's side the whole time? I think a little more hand-holding here would help the readers (or maybe it was just me) to feel satisfaction at this twist. Lastly, the small thing was that there were some pretty large words used in the book, which I think might either need to be made a point of or perhaps exchanged with slightly less academic versions. While I know YA books shouldn't be dumbed down just because they are for teens, it felt a bit like SAT vocab to find a large word used in a sentence that did not really need it. I think the large words should be used a lot as a part of the writing style (think Lemony Snicket), or else perhaps given a second thought.

Similar Stories : A book I could compare this to would maybe be like a dark and sexy take on Coraline. It had the same themes of finding yourself in a world similar to your own, where you feel happy and safe at first, but then start to see the dark and foreboding cracks in the facade. I also would compare some of the themes to Du Maurier's Rebecca, and so I had a little happy dance when the crow Manderley was introduced. Lastly, I think it could be also compared with Valente's Deathless, with the non-noble love interest who brings the girl into his world. A fan of any of these I think would find Eden an absorbing read.

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Tracey Joseph on June 21, 2017, 4:42 p.m. said:

Tracey Joseph


I'm at a lost for words after reading your review. Honestly, I don't know what to say. I wasn't expecting anything so in-depth. Thank you so much. I will definitely consider your suggestions. They are very helpful. <3

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