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Deprecated Michael Farnsworth

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As far as Rylee is concerned, every Elect deserves to have their eyes eaten out by rats and their entrails crammed down their own throats. In a time when most people fight just to survive, Rylee and her friends fight to protect Norms from the Elects who steal into the slums to rape girls and kill for sport.

But when Rylee unwittingly kills the son of a high-ranking Elect, she sets off a chain of terrible events that will consume all she holds dear. In the midst of her troubles, her life becomes entangled with a mysterious—and infuriatingly charming—Elect who comes to the slums seeking asylum. In order to save the ones she loves—and perhaps more—she must ally herself with her enemy. Ultimately, she must decide between becoming the thing she most loathes or risk losing everything. She must become an Elect herself.

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  • 85452 words
  • About 342 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    3

  • Tears

    3

  • Laughs

    5

  • Thrills

    10

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5 comments on "Deprecated"

John Clark on April 23, 2017, 9:23 p.m. said:

John Clark


It flows well and is cohesive...BUT it needs work in terms of correcting word errors, etc. In short, if it's edited, it will be far more readable.

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Michael Farnsworth on April 26, 2017, 8:49 p.m. said:

Michael Farnsworth


Want to be my editor?

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John Clark on April 21, 2017, 3:28 p.m. said:

John Clark


Nice read. I like the action, the environment and the flow. I'll keep reading.

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Michael Farnsworth on April 23, 2017, 11:36 a.m. said:

Michael Farnsworth


Thanks! Let me know what you think when you finish.

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caralin on March 30, 2017, 9:15 p.m. said:

caralin


This completely fits the classic YA formula, but still manages to be enthralling the whole way through. It was unique and unpredictable and the characters were diverse, which is always a major plus. I think the small/implied love triangle aspect was unnecessary, the story would have been just as exciting if it were just friendship. That's a small detail, though. Overall, other than the typos and name/gender mix-ups, this read like something that has already been through a few revisions. If there's a sequel out there, I can't wait to read it.

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