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Deprecated Michael Farnsworth

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As far as Rylee is concerned, every Elect deserves to have their eyes eaten out by rats and their entrails crammed down their own throats. In a time when most people fight just to survive, Rylee and her friends fight to protect Norms from the Elects who steal into the slums to rape girls and kill for sport.

But when Rylee unwittingly kills the son of a high-ranking Elect, she sets off a chain of terrible events that will consume all she holds dear. In the midst of her troubles, her life becomes entangled with a mysterious—and infuriatingly charming—Elect who comes to the slums seeking asylum. In order to save the ones she loves—and perhaps more—she must ally herself with her enemy. Ultimately, she must decide between becoming the thing she most loathes or risk losing everything. She must become an Elect herself.

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  • 85452 words
  • About 342 pages
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  • Heat

    3

  • Tears

    3

  • Laughs

    7

  • Thrills

    10

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12 comments on "Deprecated"

Ruthie.Barnett on June 8, 2017, 5:21 a.m. said:

Ruthie.Barnett


I'm only two chapters in by I have to comment. I lovve the opening so much! The narrator's voice flows so well I'm immediately sucked in to the world you've created. The banter is great too, I already feel like I know them all. Great start! Can't wait to read more. Also I never usually rate before reading the whole thing but for this I'll make an exception. :)

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Ruthie.Barnett on June 8, 2017, 5:32 a.m. said:

Ruthie.Barnett


Also sorry about the multiple notifications... My phone sketched out!

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Michael Farnsworth on June 8, 2017, 3:07 p.m. said:

Michael Farnsworth


Glad you're enjoying it. Thanks for the review!

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EmMa on May 28, 2017, 10:54 a.m. said:

EmMa


I really liked the story! Action-packed and thrilling, it was hard to stop once you started. The characters were well developed and you found yourself attached to them easily, their ideals and values realistic and understandable. Can I have hopes of a sequel?

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Michael Farnsworth on May 29, 2017, 12:15 a.m. said:

Michael Farnsworth


Glad you enjoyed it. I do have some thoughts about a sequel.

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EmMa on May 27, 2017, 2:14 p.m. said:

EmMa


I've only just passed the third chapter, but I'm really loving this! Being sucked in the action straight off the bat is definitely a good way to start a story and get readers hooked. I also like how you've taken care to include some background for the other characters. I can't wait to finish this!

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Thereaderthathasstarbucks on May 2, 2017, 5:38 p.m. said:

Thereaderthathasstarbucks


I like it. I would like to know who the elects actually were. However, so far so good.

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Books And Tea Are All You Need on April 30, 2017, 12:26 p.m. said:

Books And Tea Are All You Need


The tone of the writing is just the right amount of sarcastic, but I think this story would benefit more from 1st person POV. I'm just getting to know the characters, but Serghei is my favorite so far. Can't wait to learn more about them! The grittiness of this world is punctuated nicely, setting up for a contrast with the high society.

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John Clark on April 23, 2017, 9:23 p.m. said:

John Clark


It flows well and is cohesive...BUT it needs work in terms of correcting word errors, etc. In short, if it's edited, it will be far more readable.

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John Clark on April 21, 2017, 3:28 p.m. said:

John Clark


Nice read. I like the action, the environment and the flow. I'll keep reading.

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