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CARRION YOUTH Boyd.Jamison

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Ethan Thomas and his best friend Chris Cooper want to become popular. When a plan to improve their social standing goes wrong, the pair come to physical blows in the park. Their scuffle awakens a homeless man who is understandably hungry. Perhaps a little too hungry. He takes a bite out of Ethan's arm.

Chris has a plan to make it up to him: throw the most epic party the Neasden area has ever seen. The price for popularity is becoming too costly for Ethan, yet Chris plans the party anyway. It's a night of many firsts for Ethan. His first house party, his first kiss and his first time coughing up blood. The police arrive to restore the peace, but Ethan's injury may be worse than anyone expected.

The cost of popularity is high. One man's party might mean another's funeral.

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  • About 271 pages
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5 comments on "CARRION YOUTH"

Kaley Chandler on Jan. 28, 2017, 9:19 p.m. said:

Kaley Chandler


AHHH SO GOOD. The plot twists are ones that I never would have seen coming. Suggestion: you start out with Ethan and Chris as the main two, but they're turned to zombies and forgotten pretty quickly (by forgotten, I mean you switch POV). This left me thinking mainly about Ethan and Chris for the rest of the book (ex. Where are they? Will they be okay? Probably not, but what's happening to them?). Also, Clare's crush on Ethan is really sudden. The first chapter you switch POV, she admits to loving him, which was a big jump. Well done overall, though - I don't like horror or gore and yet I couldn't put this book down! Five stars and would DEFINITELY recommend!

World War Z - on a smaller scale, Project Almanac, and a touch of Welcome to Nightvale.

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Boyd.Jamison on Jan. 29, 2017, 9:43 a.m. said:

Boyd.Jamison


Wow, Kaley, thank you for the amazing comment and suggestions. I'm so glad you enjoyed the novel.In regards to Clare's feelings, I'm aware it's sudden but traumatic events tend to intensify one's feelings. But I'd be really interested to read comments from others about whether it should be more of slow burn.

And I'm glad you're thinking about Ethan and Chris. If this novel got picked up for publication, there are some ideas and story threads that I would like to further explore in sequels.

Once again, thank you so much for your insight and taking the time to read my work. I really appreciate it.

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jew on Jan. 2, 2017, 11:13 a.m. said:

jew


well there is suspense. I am eager to see what they find in this house.

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Michael.McGlade on Nov. 21, 2016, 4:12 a.m. said:

Michael.McGlade


I liked the premise and the group dynamic of the lead characters; It's an interesting take on a coming of age story, the folly of youth, and the hidden depths people can find when faced with an apocalyptic situation.

It was reminiscent of The Outsiders by S. E. Hinton by way of Donnie Darko.

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Boyd.Jamison on Nov. 21, 2016, 4:59 a.m. said:

Boyd.Jamison


Thanks for reading Michael.

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