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As the World Turns Cold Courtney Pierce

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Mercy Baudelaire has been locked up since the day the government took her away from her family. The reason? To save their lives. Her childhood was spent on the run, escaping the hands reaching out to pull her into a world of deadly experiments. Because of her gifts she fought so hard to conceal, freedom was nonexistent.

As Mercy finds herself on the run once again, she encounters misfits with powers of their own; allies in a game of life she was sure to lose. Now, placing faith in freedom didn't sound too impossible. But where faith exists, darkness often lies in wait. Mercy's enemies refuse to go down easily and not even time can save her now.

In AS THE WORLD TURNS COLD, Mercy sets out on an adventure to prove that in a broken world where the line between human and monster wears thin, a little faith goes a long way.

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  • 71673 words
  • About 287 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    10

  • Tears

    3

  • Laughs

    2

  • Thrills

    7

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13 comments on "As the World Turns Cold"

Creek Eaton on Dec. 6, 2017, 1:27 p.m. said:

Creek Eaton


The story was well written and the characters worked off each other well! You managed to keep it moving quickly enough that it didn't feel like the story was dragging, which is a godsend for someone with an attention span like mine!
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Courtney Pierce on Dec. 6, 2017, 2:43 p.m. said:

Courtney Pierce


Thank you so much for taking the time to read my novel and leaving feedback! I'm glad you have enjoyed it! I completely understand the attention thing as I can get like that myself when books seem to drag on. I've taken your other comments into consideration as well, and will try to implement them in the next editing round I do. Thank you again for your rating and comments!

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Creek Eaton on Nov. 30, 2017, 1:43 p.m. said:

Creek Eaton


It's interesting so far, if a little prosey. And sometimes the segways don't seem to connect that well with what they're segwaying to, but it's really good otherwise!

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Annie Stavreva on Nov. 28, 2017, 4:18 p.m. said:

Annie Stavreva


So far so good. I'm hooked!

A suggestion would be to try to make your use of language clearer as I had to go over sentences to understand their meaning. This could easily be cleared up by just changing the structure of the sentence or making it into two.

But that is if I'm being nit-picky, if this was a real book I just got from the library I wouldn't see anything wrong.

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Courtney Pierce on Dec. 6, 2017, 2:37 p.m. said:

Courtney Pierce


Thank you so much for your feedback! I do struggle with that sometimes and I appreciate your suggestion! I'll definitely put it to use when I edit. I'm glad you have been enjoying it! Thank you for taking the time to read it!

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Amber on Nov. 21, 2017, 1:03 p.m. said:

Amber


So good

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Courtney Pierce on Nov. 27, 2017, 8:17 a.m. said:

Courtney Pierce


Thank you for reading! Hope you are enjoying the story!

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Roberta Walker on Nov. 20, 2017, 11:02 p.m. said:

Roberta Walker


Courtney left me wanting to read all night. I probably will... and I have 460 miles to drive tomorrow.

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Courtney Pierce on Nov. 27, 2017, 8:16 a.m. said:

Courtney Pierce


Thank you so much for your lovely comment! It’s because of wonderful and supportive people like you that I have the opportunity to do what I love!

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Vincent on Nov. 14, 2017, 4:17 p.m. said:

Vincent


The details are incredible! My favorite part would have to be the preface, though. The poem was absolutely beautiful!

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